An Example of Substantive Editing
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Hollis Weber, Jean
Technical Editors Eyrie
2001

Abstract:

Some years ago I edited a quarterly magazine for the users of a large Australian computing network. This example (from 1985) is fairly typical of the technical articles I received from department managers. I include here the unedited text and my revised version.